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PostSubject: Re: Luke Yasenha   Luke Yasenha I_icon_minitimeWed Dec 02, 2015 9:13 pm

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Rank: S.Jonin

Village: Amagakure no Sato/Hidden Heaven Village
Element(s): Koton (Light Style), Katon (Fire Style), Doton (Earth Style) and Raiton (Lightning Style)
Specialties: Ninjutsu and Taijutsu (KenJutsu)
Special Characteristics:


Name: The Mask of the Wraith
Type: supplementary
Requirements: Unique to Luke/Shadow
Ability Tier: 2-3?
Minimum Rank: A to S
Description:
Mask appearance (would be black where the white is and red where the black is on the image):

The Mask of the Wraith is a unique mask, bound to Luke as a mask that holds the power of the creature sealed within him; Shadow. Even though he can safely used his beast's unique shadow style freely, when he dons the mask, he becomes a deadly being as the mask fuses to his face as shadow tentacles come out and around the mask, further attaching itself to his face. He then grows large, bat-like wings, covered in black scales and a long, slick tail with a tri-pronged end with a gold-rimmed ruby set into it. He also gains a black charka cloak around, forming into the appearance of a demon with medium-sized horns as well as form fitting its host. His mouth is also torn open into a four-part mandibles to better move with his mask. His pupils also appear to change into lizard-like slits. While active, the mask grants him enhanced shadow style and bonus to his charka supply by two ranks. This also boosts his speed and strength by a rank. However, he cannot use this mask for longer then four posts before becoming overcome by Shadow; the shadow demon that is sealed within him. And even during that time, he becomes much more aggressive and animalistic, going my instinct rather then higher thought processes the longer the mask remains on. And the long the mask is on, he becomes more eager to kill instead of letting someone live and becomes more ruthless against whoever he is fighting. As so, he prefers not to use it unless its absolutely necessary. The mask however isn't invincible and if broken, will restore Luke's consciousness and allow him to regain control and remove it willingly. If broken, the mask will slowly regenerate by itself, feeding on dark charka found in the darkness within people to repair itself and if thrown away, it will always return to Luke as it cannot be seperated unless Luke dies and Shadow is transferred directly into the mask.

Name: Demon bat wings and Tail
Type: 1
Description: But even without the mask, Luke can forcibly grow his wings and tail from the aforementioned form without too much effort; granting him the ability to fly for a unlimited time unless the wings become damaged or torn off. However, they grow straight out of Luke's body, causing wounds as they pass out his body, but these close up after they come out/in, but it does cause Luke pain to use, but it does have uses, both in battle and when he is required back in the Hidden Heaven Village.

The highest open rank in Amagakure right now is Special Jounin (B-Rank), as Okami took the open A-rank Jounin slot. There are not starting S-rank slots, unless you manage to score a Kage position to start.

You get one element to start with. These can be the 'advanced' elements with no components, such as light or shadow release. Check the Advanced Element library to get the coding you need to paste in the Special Characteristics section if you take an advanced element.

That mask is a solid, physical object? Bound to the user or not, that would be apped as an item after your character is approved.

Kenjutsu isn't Taijutsu, it's a separate spec. You start with D-rank Ninjutsu, Genjutsu, and Taijutsu, and you're able to take 1 specialization that would be rated as your starting rank. So you need to pick which you want to start with at B-rank, unless you plan to switch villages to take one of the other A-rank slots.

The wings and tail SC needs some serious work. You can start with wings and a tail no problem, however you will not get unlimited powered flight off a tier 1 non-combat SC. The flight itself would be a separate SC from the basic wing/tail combo, anyway. That MUST be trained, and would be classified as a minimum of tier 3 Legendary, unless you take Senjutsu as a secondary/teriaryquarternary specialization.


I can live with that history, and it more than meets the requirements. You'll need to come up with an RP sample for this character, however.
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PostSubject: Re: Luke Yasenha   Luke Yasenha I_icon_minitimeThu Dec 03, 2015 5:13 pm

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Luke Yasenha Araragi_koyomi_by_pmazzuco-d6clf7k

Basics!
Name: Luke Yasenha
Age: 26
Birthdate: June 6th
Gender: Male
Sexuality: Transgender (Male-to-Female)/Gay
Rank: S.Jonin

Village: Amagakure no Sato/Hidden Heaven Village
Element(s): Kageton (Shadow Style)
To be unlocked:
Specialties: Ninjutsu, Taijutsu and Kenjutsu
Special Characteristics:


Name: The Mask of the Wraith
Type: supplementary
Requirements: Unique to Luke/Shadow
Ability Tier: 3
Minimum Rank: A to S (However, S-rank is required for better control)
Description:
Mask appearance (would be black where the white is and red where the black is on the image):
The Mask of the Wraith is a unique mask, bound to Luke as a mask that holds the power of the creature sealed within him; Shadow. Even though he can safely used his beast's unique shadow style freely, when he dons the mask, he becomes a deadly being as the mask fuses to his face as shadow tentacles come out and around the mask, further attaching itself to his face. He then grows large, bat-like wings, covered in black scales and a long, slick tail with a tri-pronged end with a gold-rimmed ruby set into it. He also gains a black charka cloak around, forming into the appearance of a demon with medium-sized horns as well as form fitting its host. His mouth is also torn open into a four-part mandibles to better move with his mask. His pupils also appear to change into lizard-like slits. While active, the mask grants him enhanced shadow style and bonus to his charka supply by two ranks. This also boosts his speed and strength by a rank. However, he cannot use this mask for longer then four posts before becoming overcome by Shadow; the shadow demon that is sealed within him. And even during that time, he becomes much more aggressive and animalistic, going my instinct rather then higher thought processes the longer the mask remains on. And the long the mask is on, he becomes more eager to kill instead of letting someone live and becomes more ruthless against whoever he is fighting. As so, he prefers not to use it unless its absolutely necessary. The mask however isn't invincible and if broken, will restore Luke's consciousness and allow him to regain control and remove it willingly. If broken, the mask will slowly regenerate by itself, feeding on dark charka found in the darkness within people to repair itself and if thrown away, it will always return to Luke as it cannot be seperated unless Luke dies and Shadow is transferred directly into the mask.

Name: Demon bat wings and Tail
Type: 1
Description: But even without the mask, Luke can forcibly grow his wings and tail from the aforementioned form without too much effort; granting him the ability to glide around from a elevated position unless the wings become damaged or torn off. However, they grow straight out of Luke's body, causing wounds as they pass out his body, but these close up after they come out/in, but it does cause Luke pain to use, but it does have uses, both in battle and when he is required back in the Hidden Heaven Village.


Appearance!

Height:
6' 3"
Weight: 135 pounds/61 kilograms (Lightweight class in the high-up section)
Hair Color: Black
Eye Color: Red
General Description:
Luke, as from the basic appearance, is quite tall yet appears soft and almost effeminate in terms of his body structure, leading to many underestimating him as a weaker opponent. However this cannot be further from the truth as he many not appear to be packing many muscles on the outside, he has strong core muscles, meaning he can be a lot stronger then his physical appearance will lead people to believe as he's able to break large boulders with relative ease and counter seemingly stronger opponents.

From this, He has blood red eyes; a rare trait outside of a dojutsu which the pupils change to lizard-like slits when donning his mask. They normally appear sad and if anyone was emotionally sensitive (like Hinata for example) could see that he carries a great burden and pain within him and something that he struggles with everyday from the suffering he has seen. He has a soft facial shape, which fits with his effeminate appearance, but can be referred to as "cute yet handsome". His hair is soft, covering his left eye sometimes while also possessing two little horns on his head, although they appear to be horns, they are in fact hair that appear to be such.

In terms of his outfit, he wears a black karate Gi with red outlines with a large, red silk obi that wraps around his waist as a gift from his mother as a way to keep her close while he's away from the village. He also uses this to keep a wakizashi attached to it. The Wakizashi has a black wrapping and sheath and has a unique guard of six thin, but wide flat rods, around in a star-like formation with a thin ring around it to keep it all together. Near the spacer (the small bronzer clip between the blade and the guard) on the blade itself, is kanji for "Zetsubō no Sākuru" (Crushing Despair) etched into the blade. He wears his ninja headband around his forehead or around his left shoulder.

When using his succubus jutsu/in his female form; "she" shrinks down a little to be at six foot exactly, gaining buxom curves and D-cup breasts. Her hair is done in a 1940's style with long flowing curls and two horn-shaped pigtails down either side, behind her head. These pigtails are wrapped in red silk to keep them together. In this form, her outfit changes little, only enough to adapt to her new feminine features, but she does gain a black bra and panties with red frilly lace around them. She also wears long black soaks with frilly ends and a bow on them and either flats with bows on them or black and red high heels with similarly coloured bows on them. She can also change her outfit to a black swimsuit with a bow at the front, covering the breasts or a black and red babydoll if she's eager to seduce a target.


About You!
Personality:
Once upon a time, Luke grew up as a carefree and happy kid until the day Shadow was sealed within him. He was made to grow up and mature, becoming distant but never loosing his desire to help others, leading to him helping those boys and even when he was made to watch both himself and the boys get beat up, it only made his resolve to help greater. Growing into a man, he acts respectful and gentlemanly, but also with a subconscious distant to others as from the ninja academy, he felt alienated from his peers, but his high intelligence and great skills lead to him coming across as arrogant or acting superior to his peers, however, he just preferred to be alone instead of getting into a large crowd that wanted to be around him, something about how emos are hot in some strange way.

There was a time where he considered his team mates and others like family and he still does care a lot for innocent people, especially those who cannot fight back and hates when someone attacks people who clearly cannot defend themselves. However, during that fateful mission, he resolved to never again work with anyone, not out of hatred of having team mates to replace his old ones, but because he feels responsible for the murder of his fallen team mates and friends he had grown up with and will argue angrily if he is forced to do so as he cannot emotionally and mentally cope with loosing another team mate or even the possibility of killing them himself.

Luke also is transgender; desperate for a female body and enjoys his female body in his succubus jutsu, wishing it could last forever, but since without one specific criteria being met, he returns to normal and has lead to self loathing of himself and hates to see his still male body in a mirror. He does deal with it by wearing women's underwear under his regular uniform, cross dressing in private and in some occasions, replaces his boots with his feminine flats. He's also attracted to males due to him believing himself to be a girl, feels its only right for a girl to seek out a attractive male to have as a boyfriend and future lover. However, he doesn't mind seducing a woman if its necessary for a mission, but will show displeasure afterwords, showing he doesn't enjoy having to "act like a man" in that regard.

He's quite intelligent and analytical; able to understand things relatively quickly and tends to think before acting as well as seeing details others would pass by; however, he does get critical when observing both his own appearance and how he sees things. In combat, he prefers speed over strength; using kenjutsu and his high speed technique; Kageoni Kōtei to take care of enemies. He'll also use his shadow style to attack with large shadow arms or tentacles are his go to attacks for shadow style. As for his other jutsus, he goes with light and lightning styles, then fire. He uses Lightning style as a defensive style, either radiating it to get people off or channelling it through his sword or objects to either enhance his offensive capabilities or to lay electrical traps. Light style he uses more offensively along with fire style to fire beams of light or to blind opponents while using fire style for more large scale destruction.

History:

Luke Yasenha was born in the Hidden Heaven Village into the Yasenha clan, he grew up there, often inside his head to pass the time as he watched birds pass his home.

However, his clan had him taken one day as a child as he was chosen to be the container of Shadow: the demonic god that control both the shadows and darkness; a darkness to the Yasenha clan's normal light style kekki genkai releases. Luke was brought fourth as a trembling four year old child as he watched this creature smile, tasting his fear, but he also felt disgust for the child as the clan prepared to seal him inside Luke, he vowed to take his body once it was strong enough to fulfil his desires before its form dissipated, flowing into Luke's body before forming a seal in the form of the kanji for shadow (影) formed on his back. Luke then passed out, the effort of the sealing too much on his young body before he's taken back to his home and left to be watched over the course of his life to see if this was the correct decision to give this boy such power.

One day, during an outing, he spotted some kids getting beaten up by some older kids, Luke went to stop them, only to get a punch to the gut and forced onto his knees by one of the gang member, who then forced him to watch them beat the living daylights out of the kids he tried to save until some Ninja on patrol came along and chase them away and arrested them, taking the kids that were beaten up to a local medical station to be healed using medical ninjustu.

After that day, Luke vowed to become a ninja to protect those who could not protect themselves, entering the academy, learning the ways of the ninja, he spent ten years at the academy, becoming a somewhat popular student due to his ability to quickly learn jutsu and his somewhat unreachable attitude, this was because he wanted to be left alone since he disliked the attention that his popularity caused him so he more than once left people to be alone as he couldn't handle that many people and more then often, a teacher would come to console him as they were concerned that even though some could call him a genius, he had self-loathing and depression which keep him from making many friends from the academy, he spent a total of seven years in the academy, more then he needed to in order to vastly improve his mental performance, even though he passed the final exam without a problem, he continued to study to better improve himself, finishing his extended learning when he was fourteen years old, he then took the chuunin exam the following year with his two teammates, a Hyūga member who was one of his few friends at the academy for his excellent ability in his clans technique and dojustu and the other was a female taijustu master, although she was normally quite annoying happy and overenthusiastic, she could more then hold her own in a fight, they managed to complete the first two exams was relative ease before reaching the preliminaries, when Luke faced off against a genin with excellent fire style abilities, but, after a climatic final blow, Luke was victorious and made it to the finals when once again, he was force to use his tactics to defeat his opponents, even the point of using his clan's special kekki genki for a moment.

After his promotion to chuunin, he lead a squad of genin through different D & C rank missions, making sure his team was ready before he were given a B-rank infiltration mission, his first solo mission, he took off for a brothel where, according to informants, the leader of a high stakes slave trader was staying for the night for some good times as he had a weakness for beautiful and buxom women of the brothel, Luke then used a special version of one of his clan's techniques to turn him into a women, with a voluptuous body, D-cup, hourglass figure, nicely peach tanned skin, long black hair with two longer versions of his horn hair extensions coming down either side from the back of his head while her long, silky smooth hair ran in the middle of the two horn pigtails, now also with two large bat wings, enough to support flight and a tail with a tri-pronged end, sharp enough to cut flesh and stone, he also modified his clothes so his normal karate Gi was exposing his abdomen and his back but still keeping the sides, while his trousers changed into a black skirt that reach only to where his now smooth knees came to while changing the haori into a jacket of the same color, he also gave himself black bra and panties with matching red lace.

Confident his body was ready, s/he walked into the brothel, where partying was in full swing, there was wild love making to if the cries and moans of pleasure were anything to go by, s/he found herself at the attention of her target who came up to her, being rather flirty with her, so he came onto him in the most seductive way he knew how, wrapping his arms around this man's neck and taking him out the party and into a bedroom where he seemed to enjoy having a different kind of women in her chambers, having never seeing a women with bat wings and a tail before before he went down on him, servicing him before letting him take her, letting the pleasure of being united with a man take hold of her for a few minutes before she pulled her arms around his neck and pulled him into a kiss so while he was kissing her, she sent her tail into his neck, killing him almost instantly, he got to see the sadistic look on her face before he fell onto the bed, dead, she got off his now dead body, getting dressed again and cleaning her tail before locking the door behind her, making sure no one would know until she was far away and she had deactivated his technique.

However, during a mission deep into enemy territory with his team, Shadow decided it was time to play and took control of Luke's body, causing him to take on the appear of the demon in a charka cloak form and slaughtered everyone in the encampment like a wild animal, even feasting on their raw flesh and when his teamates came to help him, he attacked them, unable to control himself. The two put up their best, but he eventually critically wounded them. Before he died however; the Hyūga member used a Fuuinjutsu to seal away the new form that Luke had taken and changed it into a mask that would forever be bound to him, freeing Luke from it before he and his team died of their injuries. He fell to his knees, tears falling down his cheeks as the defining moment when he vowed never to work with a team again as to avoid such a tragedy from happening again

he continued these missions for some time, which caught the attention of the Kanetsukage, who decided to reward him for his efforts by promoting him to Special jounin, he now continues doing missions either solo or with his team of genin if told to by the kage as he teaches them to ways of ninja, while also teaching classes at the academy, teaching advanced ninjustu techniques or the arts of seducing a man or women and the benefits it has to ninja missions.


RP Sample:

Time. it was a precious thing. Timing was necessary to be able to focus on what was important and when best to strike. To waste a effort on a frontal assault when so many other opinions were laid out in front of him to get in there and out without anyone even seeing him. The moon was high in the night sky, casting its silver light on the encampment from the hidden ring of fire village; there were several tents up, housed within a cage of stone and wood. Luke smiled slightly in a psychotic way.

"They believe their walls and guards will protect them, their leader a untouchable god; well, I will delight in proving that even gods can bleed and be silenced," Luke thought to himself, his hand on his pride and joy; his blade, his Zetsubo; a silent companion in the darkness. Luke sometimes wondered if his sword could talk to him, what would it say to him. He shook his head; he had no time for such idle thought as he watched the movements of the guards, seeing a chance to get in via a side entrance the guards used from time to time. Keeping himself low and his charka level down so if they had a sensory-type, he wouldn't be detected as he stuck by the entrance, listening carefully for footsteps as one of the ring of fire chunin's walked out. Acting fast, he grabbed him, covering his mouth with his hand and running him through with his blade, seeing the terror in the man's eyes as from his view; a demon had come and ran its claws through his heart. Dragging the corpse into the darkness of the hallway, he made his way inside the encampment.

Keeping his back against the wall, he saw torches lighting up the entrance to the camp itself; their fires felt like power flowed within them. A small bit, but the undeniable sense of fire style charka came from them, meaning that if he was detected, any source of fire in this camp could become a weapon against him and he didn't like those odds. He took a few more steps nearer the archway and paused to listen again to the footsteps and patterns; he heard a few footsteps coming this way, a single man. But, as Luke drew a tri-pronged kunai out from inside his Gi; holding tightly onto the black and red wrapping around it, the footsteps stopped near the archway.

"It's damn cold outside the village; especially in these neck of the woods, I'm just looking forward for my relief to come; Lazy bastard, he's already ten minutes overdue, I should go wake him up with some fire style, that should get him going," The ring of fire chunin chuckled to himself, rubbing himself to keep warm as a chilly wind had picked up in the area and being used to being within a dormant volcano, this change of temperature bothered him and he turned to leave to a tent on the far side of the encampment, leaving Luke more then enough time to take a peck to see where their leader was; a Special Jonin like himself, said to possess the rare steel style kekki genkai, however, in all their talk, they only mentioned him being able to turn his skin into steel, making him untouchable, but that would only apply if he was aware of a enemy, not one that would come to stab him in the back without so much as a single sound.

He saw him walking out; cocky and full of pride in his abilities he had yet to train to truly be a deadly force; Luke found this man pitiful that he was so full of himself that not once had he considered that there was more to steel style then hard skin and even that wouldn't protect him forever. He looked around, eyeing the night sky as if expecting someone to challenge him before smirking and going back into his tent and Luke saw what he needed to see; a shadow, cast by the fire and facing from his back. Luke had waited for this chance and not wasting another moment, made the rat hand seal.

"Shadow Style: Shadow Teleportation Jutsu," Luke whispered before the shadows wrapped around him and he descended into the shadow world; a different dimension composed of pure darkness that anyone with Shadow sealed inside them can access and transport to any shadow, no matter how dim the shadow, as long as one is cast. However, the name was misleading as it wasn't instant Teleportation as he had to move within the shadow world to the correct shadow and then come out of it, which took a little bit of time, however, it is faster overall and useful when you don't want to be seen. He found the ring of fire Jonin's shadow and grabbed onto it, going fully silent as he drew his blade out of its sheath and slowly rose from the shadow, the shadows themselves slowly melting off his body like tar with some rising up slowly like water being splashed in slow motion. Once enough of him was out, he looked to the Jonin with his back turned, completely unaware of his presence; his eyes appearing to glow red, his outline dark like a demon that had appeared from the very darkness of the world. He brought his blade back before running it through the Jonin's heart. He turned around slowly, shaking as blood ran out his mouth and onto the floor, his eyes full of fear.

"Absolute Silence Shadow Style: Death of Sin," Luke spoke softly as the man looked on in horror as Luke fully came out the shadow, taking his feet out of the shadow as he removed his blade, the man weakly walked towards him.

"B-but this is impossible; there's no way you could have gotten me," The man called to Luke, who stood over him like the devil, ready to collect another soul. The Jonin tried to crawl towards Luke, But then died before even touching his boots. Satisfied that his contract was done, he took some of the man's blood on his blade and applied it to the contract as proof he had done it. But he had one more thing to do before he left...

The next day, one of the Chunin came to report in to the Jonin when he was greeted by his commander; pinned to the wall that his tent was hung against with tri-pronged kunai, stabbed through his hands and feet with the Jonin's own katana through his heart with kanji carved out into his chest, causing plenty of blood to have dripped onto the floor, enough that the blood was dark in colour. The kanji read simply as followed:

(私はあなたの罪の記念碑午前) "I am a monument to all your sins," Read the kanji message and as Luke watched; the camp fell into disarray with their leader killed without so much as a scream or any sighs of a struggle, leaving them to watch in horror while Luke left the sorry state of the ring of fire camp and, once he was out of detectable range; took a black scroll from out his Gi and applying some blood and the release hand seal, it burst into white smoke, revealing a larger scroll, this one as long as his arm and about as think as a rolled up piece of carpet. He threw it into the air; allowing it to unravel as he made the rat hand sign then the release hand sign as the roll of the scroll swirled around him, various symbols and kanji on them before he smacked his right hand into a large kanji sentence (吸血コウモリ=Vampire bat), surrounded by a arcane sealing circle that was formed with smaller kanji.

"Summoning Jutsu!" Luke called out as the area burst into white smoke before revealing a massive vampire bat. It turned to Luke, its red eyes staring into Luke's own, appearing to not be amused.

"I was asleep, you know I do not like to be awoken so soon; I presume you require me to fly you back to the village, right?" The giant bat replied disgruntled, its nostrils dilating in disgusted with a snort. Luke nodded.

"I'm aware you prefer to sleep until midnight, but I didn't have time to waste until then, so yes, I do need a ride back if you'd be so kind, Kōmori," Luke spoke calmly towards his summon; Kōmori huffed and laid down so Luke could get on his back, which he did, grabbing the summoning scroll and wrapped it back up before attaching the strap around his torso. He grabbed onto a red silk rope that was tied around Kōmori's neck; something that Kōmori himself objected to as it was "too girly" for him, but Luke didn't like the idea of using a normal rope in case he accident pulled too hard and choked Kōmori. The great bat looked towards the moon and their destination.

"Fine, just don't talk to me while I'm flying, I have sensitive hearing remember?" Kōmori told Luke unnecessarily since Luke had flown with Kōmori plenty of times to understand he preferred Luke not to speak since even a whisper could be the same as someone talking normally. Kōmori then beat its large wings before taking off rapidly into the sky, towards the Hidden Heaven village to report back to his superiors that he had completed his mission.



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Okay, now I touched on this in the chatbox last night, and I guess I wasn't clear enough when I said you need to check the write ups for Shadow and Light Release before you commit to them.

Quote :
Name: Shadow Release
Type: Advanced Release
Requirements: /
Ability Tier: 3
Minimum Rank: B-Rank
Description: The user is able to harness and use the power of shadows. These shadows must come from an existing source: and yet their abilities are still terrifying nonetheless. With these shadows, you are able to paralyze the enemy only, not forcing them to mimic your movements.
Unlock Requirements: Must be primary element. Cannot take another element without beast sealing or other special event.
Special Training Requirements: Shadow Release jutsu require an additional 1500 words of training. Starting at base D-Rank, each rank of Shadow Release must be trained using secondary release guidelines.

Quote :
Name: Light Release (Kōton - 光遁)
Type: Advanced Release
Requirements: /
Ability Tier: 3
Minimum Rank: B-Rank
Description: The user is able to harness the pure power of light itself for devastating attacks. Normally requiring an outside source of illumination for the initial attack, the damage is none the less immense. Requiring extreme dedication and focus to master; users of Kōton forgo the chance to learn or use other skills in favor of the raw power of light.
Unlock Requirements: Must be primary element. Cannot take another element without beast sealing or other special event.
Special Training Requirements: Light Release jutsu require an additional 1500 words of training. Starting at base D-Rank, each rank of Light Release must be trained using secondary release guidelines.

Now, I know they both have the cavate of a beast sealing, however that doesn't count for beasts that come already sealed. It would have to be sealed into you at a later time; as it stands, whatever beast is sealed into you when you're very young, as yours seems to be, would essentially override your innate chakra affinity and you would only have theirs.



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Name: Demon bat wings and Tail
Type: 1
Description: But even without the mask, Luke can forcibly grow his wings and tail from the aforementioned form without too much effort; granting him the ability to glide around from a elevated position unless the wings become damaged or torn off. However, they grow straight out of Luke's body, causing wounds as they pass out his body, but these close up after they come out/in, but it does cause Luke pain to use, but it does have uses, both in battle and when he is required back in the Hidden Heaven Village.

Type would be either Supplementary, (Non)Combat, or Cosmetic. You say these can be used in battle. How? You need a maximum glide distance set.


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Name: The Mask of the Wraith
Type: supplementary
Requirements: Unique to Luke/Shadow
Ability Tier: 3
Minimum Rank: A to S (However, S-rank is required for better control)

Requirements: /
For this ability, you set the Minimum Rank as the minimum rank needed to control it; so it would be A-Rank.
Otherwise, this is fine for the SC write up.

The history and RP sample are fine. I just need the series the FC is from, for the master listing.
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PostSubject: Re: Luke Yasenha   Luke Yasenha I_icon_minitimeThu Dec 03, 2015 6:08 pm

Okay, I must have had an idiot moment, I missed something on the wings/tail SC. Are they permanent, or do you make them grow? If they aren't permanent, it's going to cost you chakra to manifest them. Take the 1 out of type please, it's just supplementary if that's what you're tagging it as. You also didn't fix everything I said with the mask SC.

Since you're taking Shadow, you need to paste the coding I used above for shadow release into the SC section.
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PostSubject: Re: Luke Yasenha   Luke Yasenha I_icon_minitimeThu Dec 03, 2015 6:16 pm

The requirement. It would just be / .

Nah, 5 to create and another 5 to dismiss is fine. Since it's a physical construct it won't cost to maintain. It's really not a major ability, so it wouldn't be expensive. When you use them for flight it's going to cost more, but that's for later.
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PostSubject: Re: Luke Yasenha   Luke Yasenha I_icon_minitimeThu Dec 03, 2015 6:22 pm

@@ No no, don't change the coding/wording of shadow release. It's a generic release, it's not unique to you. Everyone with it uses the same thing. When you get stuff from the libraries, you can't change it. That's the base, generic forms everyone uses. The only time to change things is with custom variants; like the difference between base Rasengan (Library jutsu), or say, Planetary Mud Bomb Rasengan (custom variant).
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PostSubject: Re: Luke Yasenha   Luke Yasenha I_icon_minitimeThu Dec 03, 2015 6:35 pm

I get what you're trying to do, but you just need to remember, there are no KKG here; so while you can still use the styles and abilities however you want once you want them, you have to leave the bases as generic, so that we don't end up with x different versions that are literally nothing but a one or two word change; it causes MASSIVE headaches for everyone, players and staff alike.

I don't see anything else, so this is approved.
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PostSubject: Re: Luke Yasenha   Luke Yasenha I_icon_minitimeSun Dec 06, 2015 10:45 pm

Alright, I'm going to go through your app since Karu isn't available: since you seem eager to continue on with RPing and getting approved once more.

The only thing I need to point out is your element: you have Shadow Release. That's all fine an dandy, however you have in a spoiler beneath that that you intend on learning "light, fire, and lightning". I'd like to direct your attention to the SC you have copied from our library, more to the point the Unlock Requirement: you cannot take another element unless you have won it in an event or you have a beast sealed inside of you with an additional element (and you can only have one beast sealed inside of you). Now, while you don't have to make any changes, I'd just like you to be aware of this fact for future reference. Events that give out rewards such as additional elements are rare; and require a lot of hard work. I just want to make you aware of this.

Please remove the spoiler indicating what elements you intend on learning in the future and then bump this topic once that's been completed.
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PostSubject: Re: Luke Yasenha   Luke Yasenha I_icon_minitimeMon Dec 07, 2015 12:07 pm

Hello, welcome to the site, I'm Sasayaki.



It's in our rules for the 'shadow' element. No one gets special treatment regardless of what elements they want. It is perfectly fair.

Shadow Release

Quote :
Unlock Requirements: Must be primary element. Cannot take another element without beast sealing or other special event.


If you want different elements, I recommend you take something else other than shadow release.

Give me a moment to discuss some things with the others before approving you.

Alright. It's noted in your history that you have a shadow beast already sealed in you.  That's a flat out no. You need to find someone in character with Fuuinjutsu to seal the beast within you.


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PostSubject: Re: Luke Yasenha   Luke Yasenha I_icon_minitimeMon Dec 07, 2015 12:40 pm

Staff is about to have a serious discussion about your app. At this moment you are in need of re-approval. Please hold on any rps that you are currently in at the moment. I apologize for the inconvenience.
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PostSubject: Re: Luke Yasenha   Luke Yasenha I_icon_minitimeMon Dec 07, 2015 5:33 pm

Alright, once and for all we're going to go through this now that I've had a chance to talk to Karu.

  • First and foremost you've got a bit of coding still left in your application becuase of your spoiler that had to be removed, please get rid of that.

  • The majority rule has been that you can have your chakra beast sealed inside of you in your history; however this is purely cosmetic until the appropriate flashback threads have been made. You will, as has been said before, need to find someone with the appropriate rank of Fuuinjutsu to seal it inside of you with an appropriate word count reached.

Please make the appropriate small fixes and then bump this and we should be good.
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PostSubject: Re: Luke Yasenha   Luke Yasenha I_icon_minitimeMon Dec 07, 2015 8:38 pm

No, you have to have an actual player character seal the beast within you. Otherwise this app is now:

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